Last week Chaikaylah and I were playing Fortnite. Chaikaylah was on call with me. Chaikaylah was playing at her home and I was playing at my home. It was both of our favourite game. We love it!
I was having fun with Chaikaylah, and mum walked in the door and she had a boring old box in her hand and it was disgusting. I got this feeling like “What is in the disgusting box, let's open it.” Then mum opened the curtains and it let in the bright shining light which made my eyes twitch.
I opened the box and an adorable puppy jumped out. I thought the dog had four legs but it didn't. It had three legs. I threw the dog on the floor because I did not like the dog. I felt disgusted by the dog and annoyed by my mum. I was in an amazing game and mum ruined the game with Chaikaylah.
The puppy saw the ball under the table and he fetched the ball and brought it to me. I pushed the dog away in disgust. The dog stumbled back at me and wanted me to throw the ball. I had this weird feeling about the dog then the feeling just came to me and a light bulb went off in my head and I decided then I loved the dog.
I got the ball and went outside and had fun with the dog. I think mum got me the dog because I had one leg too and the dog has one missing too.
The End
Hello Annaliese.
ReplyDeleteI am glad this story had a happy ending.
You have included some great details and used some interesting words.
I have never played Fortnite.How do you play it and what happens in it?.
Very nice work Annalise. You have re-read, and re-crafted your writing so well, into a fantastic recount that is interesting to the reader.
ReplyDeleteHi Annalise.
ReplyDeleteI really like your writing. This is beautiful writing Annalise.
our writing is nice and creative, your ending is lovely.
Hi Annalise
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