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Thursday, August 12, 2021

My narrative

Ding a ling a ling the school bell rings. In class today not many people were there. It was very weird.  My best friend was there, Annalise and Alysha are bff. 



When the bell rang the class went to sit on the mat. Miss Clifford did the roll and the notices then she told us what to do for our writing. Annalise and Alysha went on the spinning chairs to do their writing. Miss Clifford told Annalise to go find some cardboard. She said it is in the classroom somewhere. So I looked everywhere. The only place I haven't looked is the top cupboards. We are not allowed to look in there but i did. “You won't believe what I found” said Annalise “I FOUND!!!!!! AN old dirty mirror” said Annalise very loudly. Miss Clifford turned around and said don't touch that mirror but Annalise touched the Magic Mirror and got sucked into the roblox game. But Alysha wanted to be with me so she touched the Magic Mirror and Alysha transported in the exact same place I did. Then we looked and we found a note “Hi look who i have found you need  to complete this game and it is don't be crushed by a speeding wall to get out of the roblox game but it needs to be done by 3AM From GM(game master)”.


Annalise and Alysha were scared and nervous that they wouldn't complete the game by 3AM, but they looked at each other and believed that they could do it. They took a deep breath and started walking toward the speeding wall which seemed to be coming toward them really fast. Annalise and Alysha knew they only had 20 seconds to get to the door so they ran as fast as they could, Alysha made it to the door first and got through and Annalise made it through just as the red light started to go off. They now have three more doors to get through but they were confident that they could make it through as they get back to class. They made it through the last door just as the clock turned to 2.59AM “phew just in time” Annalise and Alysha were happy to get back to class.


1 comment:

  1. VERY WELL DONE ANNALISE. You have a quality piece of writing with very good ideas and great punctuation. You have such a well planned piece of writing, with a very clear story. You have all the features you need of the, introduction, build up, the problem, and the top of the problem mountain, and resolution. Ka pai.

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